手握炮灰剧本?大佬们为我撕剧本!第2章

huidaoneijianshehuaderutongyangbanjiandewoshi,sunianfansuoshangmen,beikaozhebinglengdeshimumenban,caiyunxuzijichedituoli,huazuozaiditanshang。

xinzangyijiuzaixiongqianglifengkuangleidong,ejiaoshenchudelenghanzhanshilebinfa。naohailifanfuhuifangde,shiluchenzhoucaquxuejishineiyexingcongrongdedongzuo,yijitadichensangyinlituchudeneiju——“niquedingyaowanzheigeyouxi?”

游戏?

zheilianggezixiangcuilebingdezhen,zhadetazuolinanan。

【suzhuqingxubodongyichang,jianyipingfuxinjing,yiyingduihouxurenwu。】xitongdedianziyinyijiubingleng,tingbuchusihaoguanqie,zhiyouchengxuhuadetixing。

sunianshenxilejikouqi,qiangpozijilengjingfenxi。wulunluchenzhoushichuyushenmemudeshuochuneijuhua,shishitan、shijinggao,haishitadutedefankangfangshi,duitaeryan,jielunzhiyouyige:tabixugengxiaoxin、gengjingyedibanyanhao“edunvpeisunian”zheigejiaose,bunengrangtakanchurenhepozhan。

zouqingjie,zhuanjifen,huijia!zheishitaweiyidemubiao。

【xinrenwufabu:‘cantingdiaonan’。】【renwudidian:xueyuanxicanting。】【renwumubiao:dangzhongdafannanzhuluchenzhoushouzhongdecanpan,bingzhizeqifuwubuzhou。】【renwushixian:24xiaoshinei。】【renwujiangli:jifen+15。】【shibaichengfa:dianjichengjie(qingdu)。】

xinderenwulaile。suniankanzhe“dianjichengjie”sigezi,zuijiaoweiweichouchu。zheixitong,chengfashouduanhaizhenshijiandancubao。

tazhanqishen,zoudaojudadeluodijingqian。jingzhongdenvhaimeiyanjingzhi,pifubaixi,yishenmingpai,quedaizheyigubeijiaoguanchulaide、buanshishideaomanqixi。zheijiushitaxuyaobanyandejiaose。

“jizhu,nishisunian,sujiada**,xiaozhangbahu,yuchunedu,chilianluchenzhouqueyinaishenghen……”taduizhejingzi,dishengzhongfuzhejiaosesheding,shitujiangzijishuyushechudelinghunsaijinzheijuhualidewaiqiaoli。

xueyuanxicantinghuanjingyouya,kongqizhongpiaofuzhekafeixiangheqingroudegangqinqu。zhengzhiwucanshifen,bushaoxueshengzaiciyongcan。

suniandaizhelianggexitongbiaopeide、mianwubiaoqingde“baobiao”,caizhegaogenxie,zitaiaomandizoulejinqu。muguangrutongtanzhaodengbansaoshiquanchang,henkuaijiuzaikaojinchufangchurukoudequyu,kandaoleneigeshuxideshenying。

luchenzhouchuanzhecantingfuwushengdetongyizhifu——baichenshan、heimajia、heixiku。jishishizheiyangputongdeyizhe,chuanzaitashenshangyenanyanqitingbadeshenzihechuzhongdelunkuo。tazhengduanzheyigebaimankongbeidiedetuopan,bufawenjiandizouxianghouchufangxiang,celianxiantiaozaicantingrouhedeguangxianxiaxiandeyouxielengmo。

就是现在!

sunianshenxiyikouqi,neixinfengkuangjizijidaqi:“woshiedunvpei,woshiedunvpei……”

tadiaozhengmianbubiaoqing,rangzijikanqilaigengjiatiaotihebunaifan,ranhoujingzhichaozheluchenzhouzouqu。zailiangrenjijiangcajianerguodeshunjian,ta“aiya”yisheng,shentikansibujingyidi、shizejingzhundichaotaduanzhedetuopanzhuangqu!

“kuangdang——pilipala!”

yizhencierdesuilieshengxiangqi。tuopantuoshou,shangmiandebeidieshuaizaidalishidibanshang,shunjianbianchengyiduilangjiedesuipian。cancundeyinliaoheshiwuwuzijiankai,youjidishenzhijiandaoleluchenzhoudekujiaohesunianangguidegaogenxieshang。

zhenggecantingdezhuyilidoubeizheituruqilaideshengxiangxiyinleguolai,shunjiananjinglebushao,suoyoumuguangdoujujiaozaizheibian。

suniananzhaojuben,likehoutuiyibu,liumeidaoshu,shenshouzhizhedishangdelangjie,youzhixiangluchenzhou,shengyinbagao,daizhekuazhangdefennuhexianqi:“nizenmezoulude?!meizhangyanjingma?duangepanzidouduanbuwen!zhibuzhidaowozheishuangxieshi**ban?banimailedoupeibuqi!”

tanulirangzijideyuqichongmankebohewuliqunao,xinzangquezaixiongqianglikuangtiao,muguangbuyouzizhudimiaoxiangluchenzhou。

tahuizenmezuo?huifennu?huifanbo?haishihuixiangjubenlineiyang,chenmodichengshou?

luchenzhoudedongzuodunzhule。taditoukanlekandishangdesuipian,youtaiqiyan,kanxiangsunian。

tadeyanshenhenjing,shenheisedetongkongliyingzhetacikezhangyawuzhuadeshenying,quemeiyousihaobolan。meiyoufennu,meiyouweiqu,shenzhimeiyouyiwai。jiuhaoxiang……tazaojiuyuliaodaohuifashengzheiyimu。

tameiyoulikedunxiaqushoushi,yemeiyoudaoqian,zhishineiyangjingjingdikanzheta,kandesunianxinlizhifamao,houxudetaicichadiankaqiao。

“kanshenmekan?!”tazhinengyingzhetoupi,yonggengdadeshengyinlaiyanshixinxu,“haibukuaibazheixielajishoushiganjing!dangzhelulezhibuzhidao?zhenshihuiqi!”

jiuzaizheishi,cantingjinglijicongcongdiganleguolai,lianshengdaoqian:“duibuqi,su**!shiwomenyuangongbenshoubenjiao,chongzhuanglenin!womenmashangbatayechuliganjing!”jingliyibianshuo,yibianyanlididengxiangluchenzhou,“luchenzhou!nihailengzheganshenme?ganjinxiangsu**daoqian!ranhoubazheilishoushiganjing!”

zaijinglidehechixia,luchenzhouzhongyuyouledongzuo。

tahuanhuandunxiashen,kaishichenmodishijiandishangdesuipian。tadeshouzhixiuzhang,dongzuobujibuxu,jishishizaizuoqinglilajizheiyangdeshiqing,yemomingdaizheyizhongnanyiyanyudecongronggan。

zishizhizhong,tameiyoukansunianyiyan,gengmeiyoushuoyijudaoqiandehua。

sunianzhanzaiyuandi,tingzhezhouweiyinyuechuanlaideqieqiesiyu(“youshisunian…”、“guyizhaochaba…”、“luchenzhouzhendaomei…”),kanzheneigechenmojianshisuipiandebeiying,xinlifeidanmeiyouwanchengrenwusongyikouqideganjue,fanerxiangshiduleyituanmianhua,mendenanshou。

【renwu‘cantingdiaonan’wancheng。jifen+15。dangqianzongjifen:25。】

xitongdetishiyinrangtahuishen。

taqiangchengzhehengleyisheng,diuxiayiju“yihoubierangwozaikandaozheizhongmaoshoumaojiaodefuwusheng”,taangzhetou,zaizhongrendezhushizhonglikailecanting。

zhidaozouchucanting,ganshoudaowaimianwennuandeyangguang,tacaiqiaoqiaosonglekouqi,houbeiquejingchuleyicengxihan。

gangcailuchenzhouneigeyanshen……taiqiguaile。neibushiyinren,gengxiangshiyizhong……dongxiyiqiedelengmopangguan。

jiexialaiderizi,sunianchengleyigewubi“jingye”deyanyuan。xitongfabuderenwu,tayigebuluodiyangezhixing,bingqienuliyanchu“yinaishenghen、fengkuangjidu”dejingsui。

【renwu:‘xiangmujiehu’。luchenzhoucanyudexueshujingsaixiaozujixuyibizijingoumaishiyancailiao,suzhuxuliyongjiazuguanxi,qiangxianyibumaiduangaicailiao,bingchaofengqi‘laihamaxiangchitianerou’。】sunianzhaozuole。tadongyongsujiademingtou,qingsongjiehu。zailuchenzhouxiaozudechengyuanfenfenbupingshi,tadangzhetamendemian,duiluchenzhoushuo:“jiunimenzheizhongshuiping,haixiangzuochuchengguo?bielangfeiziyuanle,laihamaxiangchitianerou。”luchenzhoudangshizhishidandandikanletayiyan,shenmedoumeishuo,dantadezuyuanhoulaibuzhicongnalizhaodaoletidaicailiao,jingsaijuranshunlijinxinglexiaqu。

【renwu:‘qugantaohua’。younvshengxiangluchenzhoubiaodahaogan,suzhuxuqianqujinggao、diaonangainvsheng,rangqililuchenzhouyuandian。】sunianyezhaozuole。tazhaodaoneigejiluchenzhousongshuidenvsheng,yifan“nipeibushangta”、“biechixinwangxiang”deyanlunshuchu,chenggongbaxiaoguniangqikule。erdangshijiuzaibuyuanchudeluchenzhou,zhishikaozailanqiujiaxia,shoulizhuanzhelanqiu,muguanglveguota,daizheyizhongjidande、jihunanyichajuede……jiqiao?

meiyicirenwu,xitongdoupandingwancheng,jifenwendingshangzhang。

dansunianxinlidebuanqueyuelaiyuezhong。

luchenzhoudefanyingtaifanchangle。

tacongweibiaoxianchujubenlimiaoshudeneizhongyayidefennuheyinren。mianduitadezhongzhong“diaonan”,tadaduoshushihoushichenmo,ouerhuikantayiyan,neiyanshenfuzananbian,youshenshi,youtanjiu,youshishenzhirangtajuede,taxiangshizaikanyichangyouqudebiaoyan,erta,jiushiwutaishangneigemailiyanchudexiaochou。

tasihuzaipeiheta,youxiangshizai……zongrongta?

zheigeniantouyimaochulai,sunianzijidouheleyitiao。

danneizhongbeitawuxingzhongqianzhebizizoudeganjue,queyuelaiyueqingxi。

zheitian,xitongfabulexinderenwu。

【renwu:‘tushuguanduizhi’。】【renwudidian:xueyuantushuguansanloushekequ。】【renwumubiao:qiangduoluchenzhouzhengzaichayuedeguanjianziliao,bingsihuiqizhongzhongyaojiye。】【renwujiangli:jifen+20。】【shibaichengfa:dianjichengjie(zhongdu)。】

kandao“sihuiziliao”,sunianmeitouzhouleqilai。zuoweiqianshechu,tashenzhizhishiheziliaodezhongyaoxing,zheizhongchuncuipohuaizhishizaitidexingwei,rangtacongxindigandaopaichi。

danchengfashizhongdudianji……tayaoleyaoya,haishizouxiangtushuguan。

sanloushekequhenanjing,zhiyoulingxingdejigexueshengzaimaitoukudu。tahenrongyijiuzhaodaolekaochuangzuozhedeluchenzhou。yangguangtouguobaiyechuang,zaitashenshangtouxiamingminganandeguangying,tazhengzhuanzhudikanzheyibenhouhoudewaiwenshuji,pangbianhaifangzhejibentankaidecankaoziliaohebijiben。

sunianfangqingjiaobu,zoudaotazhuoqian。

luchenzhousihumeiyouchajuedaotadedaolai,yijiuchenjinzaishuhaizhong。tadecelianzaiguangxianxiaxiandegewairenzhen,zhangjiedichui,bilianggaoting。

sunianshenxiyikouqi,shenshou,kuaisuchouzouletazhengzaikandeneibenshupangbian,yibenkanqilaixiangshihexincankaowenxiandecezi。

luchenzhouzhongyutaiqitou,kanxiangta。

sunianbikaitadeshixian,nulirangzijixiandemanhengwuli:“zheibenshu,woyaole!”shuozhe,tazuoshijiuyaosidiaoqizhongdejiye——zheishixitongyaoqiudedongzuo。

raner,jiuzaitadeshouzhichupengdaoshuyedeshunjian,luchenzhouquekaikoule。tadeshengyinbugao,zaianjingdetushuguanliqueyichangqingxi。

“di137ye,di5xing,youyigeguanjianshujudeyinyongcuowu。”tayuqipingdan,fangfozaichenshuyigekeguanshishi,“nishoulineiben,shixiancunziliaoli,weiyibiaozhuleyuanshichuchude。”

suniandedongzuomengdijiangzhu,sichededongzuojinxingbuxiaqule。

ta……tashishenmeyisi?shizaigaosuta,zheibenshuhenzhongyao,bunengsi?haishizaishitanta?

tataitou,zhuangjinluchenzhoushenbujiandideyanmouli。tadeyanshenhenpingjing,shenzhidaizheyisijidande、leisiyu“tixing”deshense。

suniandexintiaolouleyipai。tazuanzheshuyedeshouzhiweiweifadou。

撕,还是不撕?

sile,renwuwancheng,nadaojifen,dankenenghuidiaoyifenzhongyaodeyuanshiziliao,erqie……huibuhuizhengzhongtamouzhongxiahuai?

busi,renwushibai,chengshoudianji……

dianguanghuoshijian,sunianzuochulejueding。tabunengzhendequhuidiaokenengduibierenzhongyaodezhishi。erqie,luchenzhoudetaidutaiguiyile!

tamengdijiangshuheshang,zhongzhongdipaizaizhuozishang,fachu“pa”deyishengxiang,yindebuyuanchujigexueshengbumanditaitou。

“shenmeposhu!xiedeluanqibazaode,genbenkanbudong!”taqiangxingjizijijiaxi,yongxianqideyuqiyangaigangcaideyouyu,“haijini!langfeiwoshijian!”

shuowan,tabuganzaikanluchenzhoudefanying,jihushiluohuangertao。

paochutushuguan,zhanzaikongkuangdeguangchangshang,suniancaifuzhexigaidakouchuanqi。

【jinggao!renwu‘tushuguanduizhi’weiwancheng!pandingshibai!zhixingzhongdudianjichengfa!】

xitongdejinggaoyingangluo,yiguqiangliede、fangfonengsilielinghundedianliushunjiancuanguosuniandesizhibaihai!

“ea——”tamenhengyisheng,tuiyiruan,xianxieguidaozaidi,etoushangshunjianbumanlenghan,lianseshabai。zheiganjuebixiangxiangzhonghaiyaotongkubaibei。

chengfachixuledayuewumiao,quemanzhangdexiangyigeshiji。

dianliuxiaoshi,sunianhunshentuoli,jihuzhanbuwen,kaozaipangbiandeludengganshang,weiweizhandou。

jiuzaizheishi,tadeyanjiaoyuguang,sihupiejiantushuguansanloudemougechuangkou,yidaotingbadeshenyingzhanzaineili,zhengjingjingdifushizheta。

是陆沉舟。

julitaiyuan,takanbuqingtalianshangdebiaoqing,danneizhongbeizhushideganjue,queqingxiderangtajibeifaliang。

takandaolema?kandaotabeichengfadelangbeiyangzi?haishi……tazaojiuyuliaodaolezheigejieguo?

【tadaodishizaiyinren,haishizaizongrongwode“biaoyan”?】

zheigeyiwen,rutongtengman,zaitaxinzhongfengkuangzizhang,chanraodetajihuzhixi。zheichangxi,sihucongyikaishi,jiutuoliletayuxiangdeguidao。ertazheigeziyiweishide“yanyuan”,huoxuzaoyichenglebierenyanzhongde……liewu。

tushuguanrenwushibaidailaidezhongdudianji,rangsunianzaichuangshangtangledabantiancaihuanguojinglai。neizhonglinghundouzaizhanlidetongchu,rangtaduixitongdechengfajizhiyoulegengshenkedekongju。

raner,bishentishangdebushigengrangtaxinjide,shiluchenzhouzaitushuguanchuangkouneidaomohuquewufahushidezhushimuguang。takandaoleduoshao?youcaidaoleduoshao?